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home among the trees by ~redhousepainters:iconredhousepainters:





back when we were young
in the deep lit trees
of the forests where we strung
wire.... from tree to tree
anything so we'd feel free

and it always seemed so complete
we were home among the trees
among the people and the things
that were never really there
but we were happy with the fact
that we never really cared

and we'd imagine our town
with our stores all around
and we'd dream up our lives
with husbands and wives
content in our plans
disregarding all our parents
"can and cant" 's

and it always seemed so complete
we were home among the trees
among the people and the things
that were never really there
but we were happy with the fact
that we never really cared

and we knew we built it ourselves
we dreamed up a world so empty and free
we never bothered to delve
into what it really means

in the world in our minds
life always seemed so simple
with control over the skin of time
our worries were barely a dimple

and it always seemed so complete
we were home among the trees
among the people and the things
that were never really there
but we were happy with the fact
that we never really cared
©2005-2009 ~redhousepainters
:iconredhousepainters:

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i dont know what to say in these things, hows this ":chainsaw:"

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:iconpengringo:
Wow, that is really wonderful... I absolutely love it

such a nice change from to 90% of the world hates me/kill myself dreck that is submitted as "poetry" on this site...

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"Hell, nobody is perfect. If you ask me, it is our imperfections that make us great."

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:iconredhousepainters:
i very much agree with you
i cursed very loudly when i noticed that there is now a poetry categoy called emotive poetry.... i cant stand that shit . the good poets, frost, etc. never wrote about cutting themselves... im just happy other people can see more than negativity in modern poetry...

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:iconthrottlejockey:
That's awesome, it totally has me remembering playing in the woods in Madison when I was little. Great job! One suggestion though, I would change this line:
"disregarding all our parents
'can and can't' 's"

I think it would sound better if it was 'can't and can's or something like that.

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"My life is not a journey to the grave with the intention of arriving safely in a pretty and well preserved package, but rather I will skid in broadside, thoroughly used up, totally worn out, and loudly proclaiming...

WOW...What a Ride!"
:iconpengringo:
Indeed :)

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"Hell, nobody is perfect. If you ask me, it is our imperfections that make us great."

Visit these too ~BeforeDawn ~Blyzzard ~bobthedinosaur ~flawed-helix ~survived-abortion

Member of *macrophoto
:icondeathrages:
oooo........ and u said u cant write.... LIAR!!!! :D :D :D ;P You are great!!!! this is slimpy just wonderfully written and got very good imagery.... strong too!!! GREAT!!!

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Errr... I dunno how to sign from here =.=
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forgot to tell ya... i am faving it!!! lol...

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Errr... I dunno how to sign from here =.=
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adam.. i might as well stop commenting on these...
because i keep saying the same thing.
you have awesome posum poetry.

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hooray for the madness.
we are better by design.

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